Wednesday, July 18, 2012

Hookers and Hangers Continued (Emphasis on the Hangers)

It's Wednesday! Which means we're on to the 'Hanger' part of the Hookers and Hangers Blogfest sponsored by Falling for Fiction! In case this is your first time hearing about it:




Here's the deets:
Hookers & Hangers Blogfest July 16th & July 18th

We all know how important the first and last lines are in every chapter. This blogfest will hopefully get your HOOKERS and HANGERS polished making it impossible for readers to put down your book and leaving them begging for more!

On July 16th, post the first sentence from each chapter.

On July 18th, post the last sentence from each chapter.

Post as many as you like!

We will be judging everyone’s first three HOOKERS and first three HANGERS. We’ll each pick two winners (MOST ENTICING HOOKER and MOST IMPOSSIBLE HANGER) making a total of ten winners! Winners will receive a 10 page (double spaced) critique and a Friday Spotlight on FFF!


Of course I can't win, as I'm an FFF lady and one of the judges, but it's fun to participate! So here are my HOOKERS for Jen Morris' and my collaboration, Already There. (Told in Alternative POV between Charlie and Lucy. I'm Lucy.) 

The one line pitch: When Charlie is forced to bring her younger sister Lucy on a road trip with her best friends, the two confirm they are nothing alike, but realize the confidence they have in each other is the only thing that will give them the courage to face their futures.


Hangers:


Chapter 2: Dad would be so upset if he knew she was doing this for a guy.


Chapter 4: But I know better than to get my hopes up with my sister around. She has a way with men. My inexperience and blubbering nonsense don’t stand a chance.


Chapter 6: How can I possibly compete with that?


Chapter 8: “You and me both.”


Chapter 10: Or was he just a fun time? A time that is now over. Forever in her rearview mirror.


Chapter 12: Suddenly I feel a little less lost.

Chapter 14: I left my clutch at the corndog stand.                                                                                                    

Chapter 16: “Can you call Dad?”

Chapter 18: 
Charlie’s acting like me. And I’m filling the space once occupied by her.


Chapter 20: I slam my hands down. “Grow up, Lucy!”


Chapter 22: I wasn’t lying.
Chapter 24: I am destined to always be this way. Alone.

Chapter 26: And he holds me together, as tears of joy leak onto his shirt.

Chapter 28: And a real cowboy, one that likes me, is going to help me pick them out.

Chapter 30: Why is Charlie writing a song about me?

Chapter 32: This Fourth of July is already turning out better than the last time we were here. And I never thought that would be possible.

Chapter 34: I hope the sun never rises. We can stay out here all night; hiding from a day we both hope never comes.

Chapter 36: And Charlie seems to think if I put my mind to it, there’s little that can stop me.

It's amazing how much we can learn about a book just from the first and last lines of each chapter. Hopefully you're having as much fun reading all the Hookers and Hangers as I am!


44 comments:

  1. These are all wonderful, but I melted a little when I read number 34! Beautiful!

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  2. Fantastic hangers, they were all wonderful and would have me jumping to the next chapter. But the one that really resonated with me was: But I know better than to get my hopes up with my sister around. She has a way with men. My inexperience and blubbering nonsense don’t stand a chance. - I think we've all been in that position at some point in our lives.

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  3. Wow! These are wonderful! I think Ch. 18 is my fav.

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  4. I feel so much emotion coming from these hangers. Love Lucy. Very impressed. :) x

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  5. Ohh they're all good... I really like the first one:)

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  6. Love #34. It's very different reading the last time when you don't know what happened leading up to. On their own, they're not enough to keep you reading. But they sure can help. :)

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  7. Boy. You've really got me wanting to know what's happening before these lines too.

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  8. These are great! You had me hooked right away with the first one. :)

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  9. sweet story and voice! great hangers =)

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  10. Ah, these are awesome! I love so many of them...like all of them :D

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  11. I'm all for corndogs and real cowboys. Nice job!

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  12. I really like the 1st and last ones, but they are all great. You're too awesome!

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  13. Ah, Lucy, you lay your heart out in these hangers :) She's a great character Kelley! This story is awesome!

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  14. Nice post and endings. Definitely enjoyed reading your hangers posting today!

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  15. Wow, your hangers are so much better than mine. They are all packed full of so much emotion! And the one about the song is one of my favs but I LOVE where she talks about not wanting to face the next day. So sad. YAY for Lucy!!

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  16. I love the one from Chapter 34, excellent! I like how we get a real sense of what your novel is like by reading those hangers...

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  17. Again, I'm blown away. I feel so privileged to have read this!

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  18. These are all great though I partic like Ch 6.

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  19. Number 2 had my my chin on the desk wondering what was going on. Great last lines.

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  20. You definitely have a talent for cliffhangers!

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  21. 2, 4, and 24 are my favorites, but I did love the shout out to the corndog stand :)

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  22. I thought I liked number 2 the most, but then I read number 34. ::sigh:: young love is incredibly potent...

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  23. Chapters 2 & 18 were definitely my two favourites :) Love the characterization/voice in those :)

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  24. The one for chapter 34 is beautiful!

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  25. oh chapter 34 for sure. Funny how much of her personality shines through in just a few lines. Same for Charlie in Jenny's post. Their voices are so distinct. Love it.

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  26. Ahhh! Great hangers! Agree with the others on CH 34 but I like them all! :)

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  27. I really like chapter 12. Good to offer some hope for the MC, before that she sound like she is going through some stuff. Nice job.

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  28. Great lines, Kelley! I think my favourite of yours is this:

    And he holds me together, as tears of joy leak onto his shirt.

    The "he holds me together" part is cool.

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  29. I've been enjoying these hookers and hangers, especially because every time I read the headline it sounds so scandalous. I LOVE this one: "I left my clutch at the corndog stand." It just brings up a perfect picture in my head :)

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  30. Good hangers Kelley. The publisher who accepts this book will be very lucky.

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  31. I love 10 and 34. Those are my favorites! Well done. Sorry it took me so long to get over here!

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  32. Fantastic hangers. I love how I've gotten a sense of people's WIPs from reading these.

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  33. You're right! I feel like I can really get a sense of who Lucy is and what she might go through in your MS! And I want to read it! Well done!!

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  34. Such a fun blogfest! My favorite: "Chapter 34: I hope the sun never rises. We can stay out here all night; hiding from a day we both hope never comes." So good!

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  35. I also love the end of chapter 34. Beautifully written. :)

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  36. I love yours! Bodacious hangers. Your WIP must be excellent! I see so much in my minds eye from your hangers. You left me hangin'! :-)

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  37. Enough already. I got to read this book of yours! :)

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  38. These are really nice. I like how we get a sense of their journey and relationship. The last line is really cute, and uplifting! And 34 is great too.

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  39. I really like 6 as a hanger by definition. It does leave you wondering what comes next. I like 10 and 18 just because they are so well written. As in super above and beyond the rest. The others are really good. 18 and 10 are exceptional...in my opinion. For what that's worth. I always say my opinion and 50 cents will get you a gumball... so there. Thanks for sharing!!! BTW, I am not so quick on the uptake here... it is taking me forever to separate out the Falling For Fiction group from everyone else participating in the hop. All of you have multiple blogs, I think, and being new to it all is just flat out confusing. But, I think I am getting the "hang" of it... as in understanding you are not solely Falling For Fiction, but you might have a hanger on your own page. Or a blog that is yours alone. Can I just say that I have had A LOT on my mental burner????

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  40. Love them. They're great paired with the other lines.

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  41. A lot of fun hangers here. I think #10 is the best, because of the terseness.

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  42. Oh man, 12 and 24 definitely got to me. I'd read this book just off of those lines.

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  43. Love #4 and #12. Sounds like someone has a major self-esteem problem!

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